The spread of SRM6 without Artemis is pretty horrible, so you need to be close up and personal for maximum effect. You could very well downgrade your MPL to SPL (or ML) because of this. The weight saved can be used for additional DHS. Also, don't lower your medium or light mechs' leg armor. It's a premier way of killing those. Finally, as your right side is for shielding purposes only, you can cut a bit of armor there to improve on the vital parts (read: legs)
I think the 2nd Double may be overkill. I usually aim for 1.2 on my Cooling Efficiency. However, I was having ammo problems with the SRM6, so using your advice I swapped the MPLas out for SPLas and added 1 more ton of SRM Ammo and the 6 armor from the legs back, and a DHS. Though, as it is now I haven't been legged in a BSDub yet. People are usually pretty stunned when I pass the XL Check. However, if STD Build become more commonplace I think legging may be more of an issue.